(EXTREME SPOILER AHEAD) Okay i feel stupid... is the claire ending the only ending?! Or did i mess up and didnt see a choice button!? Heeellllppp
One Thousand Lies
A downloadable game for Windows, macOS, Linux, and Android
|Published||Mar 28, 2016|
|Platforms||Windows, macOS, Linux, Android|
|Tags||Anime, Comedy, english, philosophical, psychological, renpy, Romance, Short, spanish|
|Asset license||Creative Commons Attribution_NonCommercial v4.0 International|
|Average session||A few minutes|
|Languages||English, Spanish; Castilian|
|Links||Steam, Homepage, Steam Greenlight, Twitter|
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One Hidden Truth in the main menu :)
Thank you for this awesome kinetic novel that -- as I realized only after reading the analytical threads on steam -- truly is a piece of literature, not "just a story". I'm a bit ashamed that I didn't try to analyze it while reading.
Now I'm not even sure about whether the Luce ending is true or not. After Claire "went down the stairs and disappeared", the same view of her standing above him on the stairs and the sun rising behind her he had when they first met comes again and she asks him to stay with her. Would be "the good ending".
Or was he just breaking all chains in a literal way when he says farewell to everyone including Luce when he gives her the empty box, meaning the figurine has disappeared (reintegrated in his now healing personality) along with Claire. After all, when they are about to kiss the light goes dark and after it comes again he has disappeared. In that case, the final scene would once more just happen in his imagination. This would be a very sad ending indeed.
10/10 for everything - story, CG art, background art, music.
My waifu is Claire (if she existed), the one to go for irl clearly (pun intended) is Luce.
i came here for sarcasm and waifus but nowhere does it mention that this game also includes an existential crisis.
the best waifu is obviously the baldy bastard. he is so beautiful, so perfect in every way. he deserves all the love in the universe. he beats all the other waifus in everything. baldy bastard will always hold a special place in my heart.
Thank you very much for creating this game. The thought always goes that video games will be the next mainstream form of artistic expression, and that current attitudes towards them as being inane and only meant for entertainment is just a passing phase (as happened to movies and even literature, originally!) This should go especially for visual novels given that they are the most literary of video game formats.
Despite this, not all visual novels are written particularly well or seem to have literary merit. But One Thousand Lies was an incredible read—and the fact that you are bilingual only makes the eloquence of the English even more incredible!
I know I shouldn't ask questions like these—stories are meant to stand on their own—but I feel too attached to the characters to not ask. In your interpretation, at least, what happens to Ziva and Ciarán's relationship after graduation? Do they remain friends, or do they grow distant?
Sort of related to that, what happens to Ciarán's relationship with all his friends? The epilogue suggests that they all grow distant since they don't celebrate Luce's birthday, perhaps indicating that the friend group hasn't come back together. Or was it just that only Ciarán didn't attend, or they just couldn't organize it but stay friends regardless, etc.
Also, one last question on the side: was Claire's design at all related to Koishi Komeiji from Touhou? The color scheme and the hat and (in my interpretation of the story) the characters as being related to subconscious psychology seemed all related to me.
Again, thanks for creating OTL and best of luck with your future projects!
Thanks a lot for your kind words signus! I really appreciate it.
Umm as you say it is a bit troublesome if I say "what happens next", and more in this story that the entire point at the end is about "Based on a story that I will make true", putting everything in that hope that you need to use to build your own future. However I can say that the ending is obviously bittersweet and that as you can guess the birthday party doesn't really happen, at least not normally.
Growing distant is not a bad thing though, since sometimes that may be the best to forget about the past and get over the trauma... and Ziva's own obsession. She was also stuck in the past trying to heal Ciar, making it dubious if she was in love, was only a sense of responsibility, or maybe even her own selfish desire to "make things right" and bring that "perfect world" she talks about in Chapter 4 at the arcade.
Maybe even after going past their past they can meet again, and start all over. That would be great don't you think? At the end you can't really know since this is a story full of lies, and whatever truth you try to guess out from it depends of your own interpretation (or at least that was my aim).
Finally about Koishi... you are totally right hahaha. I'm pretty much touhou obsessed so yes, Koishi was a reference for Claire the entire time (and Marisa for Luce to a lesser degree I would say). While writing I would think of her, and then finally when I explained and made documentation for Bonkiru, the artist, she was the main reference I gave him. Never told him to use the same color scheme, only the hair had to be silver for symbolism about the moon and she had to be a loli to make sure it fits with the time Ciar's trauma happened, but since it is a nice color scheme he just decided to use it anyways and go for it.
He did the same for Ausse using Battler from Umineko as the reference (they look a bit alike, right?) and the Baldy using Professor Badass as reference. Although knowing him he could probably work as a teacher too, who knows?!
Anyways thanks again for everything, I appreciate these comments a lot and they help during the hard times of deving (practically everyday tbh). So you all help to make this worth it. Thank you!
Just wanted to stop by and tell you how much I absolutely adored your game. I'm a big fan of your absurd type of humor and there are 3 or 4 scenes that I fondly remember laughing non-stop, tears in my eyes (That bald guy man). I really appreciate the psychological aspect you put into the characters and your way of telling a good story.
I also couldn't have read it at a better time since it was when I kind of had a philosophical type of breakdown about life in general a few months back. I won't go too into it but the philosophy presented about lies and truths was exactly what I needed to hear at the time so it was marvelous and just what I needed. I'll be rereading it soon with my gf so we can both enjoy it.
I saw that you had your next game planned which I'm super excited to see! I'm an Argentinian Artist and if you're looking for any help with translation English/Spanish or maybe need some assets drawn I'd love to pitch in. Either way I love your work and am willing to pay full price if you're planning to sell it.
Good luck man!
Hello Swordticus, or should I say hola? Si eres argentino imagino que la segunda es una mejor opción pero voy a usar inglés ya que me has preguntado en inglés por ahora ;)
Glad to see I made an impact on you, it's always great to hear stories like that and it makes all the work worth it. Hope your gf likes it too (and well even if she doesn't it's always nice to get feedback at least haha). For my new project we are working pretty hard right now to be able to announce it and don't really need anything "right now" but maybe in the future that may not be the case. Feel free to send me or leave me your portfolio for your art if you want, who knows if I may request you something someday, or at least I always like to see what other artists do (and support them too since I know how hard is to get somewhere in this craft). Or simply feel free to add me to twitter (@Keinart) or something when the time comes. I sure will need all kind of proofreading and testing in every possible language (I actually write in spanish since I'm from Spain myself and then translate to english), so you can count with that at least haha.
See you around and thank you!
Dale! Lo dije todo en ingles para no quedar raro en un mar de comentarios en "English" jajaja. Seguire en ingles mas que nada para que otros podran seguir la conversacion.
I don't want to pry too much but I imagine the pain in the butt preparations for announcing a game would be. I'm guessing it involves things like mainly preparing promo art, a basic synopsis to hook fans in and building a little bit of "hype" around it as much as possible. Maybe even doing some guest posts here and there to get some eyes heading towards your direction. I wish the best of luck with you on that! You seem to have everything under control and know what you're doing. If you're ever needing ideas on better implementation I can always try to have a stab at it.
As for a portfolio, thank you for your interest! I've done some concept art for clients in the past but since I've only done art as an on and off thing (I'm mostly studying engineering actually) I never built up a full on portfolio. I can send you 2 or 3 samples that I think you'd be most interested in but I don't want to feel like I'm spamming your game page with things that have nothing to do with OTL. I'll leave my email here just in case you ever want to message me or so I can send you the samples. Swordticus@gmail.com. I also added you on twitter :)
If you ever need anything just holler! Money isn't an issue for me and I'd love to take part even if it's just a small little thing.
Good luck man! Suerte!
Got it! As I said before right now we don't really need anything but I'll keep your email and let you know if something comes up or at least I manage to announce the title. Every little help will probably be appreciate it since we are aiming high this time. Thank you and see you around! Suerte a ti también.
I played your excellent game a few days ago and suffice it to say that it is my favourite visual novel now and I will be eagerly awaiting your next work!
I have just one question (and I think I have read most of the discussions online): Am I correct in thinking that the prologue written from Diniz's perspective and took place right before the library accident?
P.S. Really loved the ending! Luce was my favourite character in the game, so I'm really glad about the fourth requirement. Don't listen to the people who insist on Ziva or Claire being the waifu >.<
Thank you! Really glad you liked it so much!
And about the spoiler, yes, you are correct ;)
can someone tell me if this is a visual novel? I mean to ask if there are any choices for us to make?
Just a quick question, for the mall scene did you use a picture of the centre in Milton Keynes, UK? I was just surprised to see somewhere I recognise in a game.
One of the finest game I ever played. but its bit too long. When I was playing it I though I have to go through all those thousand lies.
I have not notice how many lies he (or I) said in this game. But what matters to me in the game is how it flows. Kinda get both keened or bored while playing.
Found Ziva annoying, tbh. LOL
Okay time for rating -
Character Development - 5/5
Sound Tracks - 10/5
Story - 3.5/5
Dialogues and Humor - 4/5
Visuals - 5/5
Interactivity (Choices) - 2/5 (very few)
Overall, the one must play game for android visual novel fans.
Thanks for writing this, it's a great story. The dialogues are lively, the characters are well shaped, the humor is a harsh workout for the abdominal muscles, the drama is powerful, scenes flow naturally and the pacing sits in a comfortable sweet spot so that the narrative feels just as long as it's supposed to be (something unfortunately unusual for most visual novels :p ). I loved how every single line in the story is a Chekhov's gun.
There is one element that felt a bit dissonant to me, though. Some spoilers ahead.
Baldy. It is made pretty clear in the story that Ciarán is an unreliable narrator, and Ziva's comment on schizophrenia and how schizoid personalities tend to warp reality to fit their own mental image is pretty much a full explanation for what's told in OTL (including Claire). So lights go off at the most dramatic moment, Ciarán's sleight of hand likewise fails or succeeds situationally for the best effect and graduation parties turn into airsoft battle royales. All good. But I think Baldy took it a bit too far and his constant, full defiance of common sense made it hard to keep disbelief suspended for me. I could see how this might be done on purpose to give the reader one more clue, but it's the one place where I think it's too much, lampshaded though it is.
Also, but this really is a tiny, obnoxious nitpick, this is a kinetic novel, not a VN :p
But overall, I loved it. Really looking forward to your next work :)
Haha that's ok, you are not the only one who thinks the Baldy was a bit overboard and it's understandable. I guess I simply have a thing for absurd humor and the Baldy is the kind of humor resource that strikes me fancy. Still I'm glad you liked it overall and I apreaciate your comment and insight. I'm also glad to see you figured out a lot of small details most people don't notice :)
Hi Keinart, this is my first visual novel wanted to try it when i watched the anime TWGOK.
and i can say with all my heart that i loved it i even lost some sleep because so many things are running in my mind, i found my self conflicted with different feelings ^.^ ~
but just like any great story it had to end, what killed me inside the most is the part the line "(there was only silence on the other side of the phone)" which made me tear up knowing the truth behind Claire (Ciaran could have pressed the mute button but it would have been described in that scene since it was a very important detail) at 1st i was a bit doubtful about it when they were in the library and the fact that she can materialized just about anywhere he his but the line confirmed one of my favorite character never really .........;
When i searched about the meaning of the Ciaran 's name i can see how it connected with Claire representing as the Moon and Luce as the Sun it was amazing where you got your basis for this story and the music Clair de Lune OMG!! one of my favorite piece when i'm playing the piano <3.
oh yeah i remember a line as well "Moonlight is a reflection of Sunlight" that was stated by Claire meaning (for me) that everything that Ciaran did with Claire he always reflected on what he wanted to do with Luce but maybe it's just jibberish, sorry kinda just spewing out random things.
I don't really go in-depth through this kind of things not really the type of person to go as much to go deeper than foretold in the story, still wanted to what other characters did after the graduation specially with Ziva who Ciaran released from the shackles of guilt, cause knowing Ziva was emphasize as a responsible person and she felt like she was responsible to "Fix/ Save" him but in terms of Romance between them there were none it was mostly from pitty from Ziva's side.
Sorry just really amazed with your work and i hope i can see more from you ^.^.
Thank you very much, and nothing to be sorry about I really appreciate your comment! You are not wrong about the moonlight and sunlight part either, I think in general you got a really good grasp of everything including Ziva and everything else :)
Thank you very much for your comment, and stay tune for more things in the future!
Oh good ^.^ thought i was creating an own world for my self :c ~
oh yeah made a lil something for my favorite character.
It's not as good compared to the art in-game i hardly started drawing around 6-8 months T_T and annoyingly using a mouse still hope you like this fanart i did based on Claire :D
bleh ~ sorry for my bad english and script XD. ~
This is super cute, thank you very much, means a lot to me. For a mouse drawing it is amazing!
I also love Claire a lot, even though people think the opposite, but for me she's kinda special. Thanks again for your support and the drawing :)
Glad you liked it ^. ^ ~
Claire would me my 1st fave i cant imagine hating someone so pure and the MC would be my second Endyien because of how conflicted his life is, trying to find meaning and acceptance, cause before the graduation he was trying to find at least a recognition for himself but because of the shackels within him just like his story he became a lone wolf which made him mostly an unapproachable outcast despite being a class clown in my opinion.
Srry going overboard again i just really love the game :) ~
Well thank you for replying i hope i read another great story from you in the near future ~
Well ill stop annoying you now ^°^~
sorry if i dont have some long meaningful comment, ive always been pretty blunt with my words, but this has been an experience that i havent had the likes of in years and i very much enjoyed it, even made the modified title screen my background.
Thank you very much for your kind words, sometimes blunt and direct is better than long complicated posts. I'm really glad you liked it!
Como muchos otros, he creado esta cuenta, simplemente, para decirte que tu juego me ha gustado; precioso a mi parecer, a parte de hacerte una pregunta, la cual; es la siguiente:
En el apartado de extras; dentro de la galería, hay 7 imagenes, 3 de las cuales, las tres primeras para ser mas exactos, no se me han desbloqueado, teniendo en cuenta que me he pasado el juego, por qué no se han desbloqueado? Me gustaría saber que esconden esos candados. ( Sera porque me he saltado alguna parte de la historia? porque hay un bug? El único que puede saberlo, eres tu. )
En cualquier caso necesito una respuesta, esas 3 imagenes bloqueadas me están destruyendo des de dentro como si fuesen ácido, de antemano, gracias y, otra vez, te digo que tu juegos es precioso.
Ah, creo que es un bug raro porque ya ha habido más de uno que me lo ha dicho que le pasa y sinceramente no he conseguido nunca replicarlo. Si quieres desbloquearlo es tan fácil como volver a pasar por el juego, puedes simplemente hacer nueva partida y darle al tab para que se salte todo el texto y con eso debería ser suficiente. Es extraño porque a la mayoría le suele pasar solamente con la CG de la piscina, pero a veces a otros les pasa con otra, a ti con tres. Si algún día averiguo por qué pasa intentaré parchearlo.
Por lo demás gracias por el comentario, me alegra que te haya gustado. ¡Un placer!
Out of one thousand novels
This is one hidden gem of a novel i will never forget!
hi there i'm new at this otome thing (I use to only watch ) but your game was the rose...XD I mean It looked Interesting when i finsh the game i will tell you what i think but right now i thing its looks awsome XD
When I originally began reading this story, I was slightly under the impression that it would be like those stupid romance novels where the only choice you make is for which ending of the game you'd prefer, but like you warned us, there were no choices to make. For that reason, I can't call this a game. However, for the beautiful creation that this is, I have a feeling that any other style of presentation would have ruined it.
Your imagination is truly wonderful and your dedication to this project apparent. I'm glad to have been presented with a chance to read this and even more for being able to read this to the very end. I love how you even rewarded our curiosity with those short stories Ciar supposedly wrote. Despite being separate from the main story, they somehow never seemed out of place, and I was left thinking of them just as much as the situations our characters face over time.
Though I have to admit: who was that bald guy? What was the point of him being everywhere at once? Was he just meant as comedic relief or symbolic of something deeper? Perhaps I'm just not seeing the connection, but he did make me laugh a lot. ...Still don't want to meet him in real life though. He's pretty intimidating...
Anyways, since I've stayed up too late both reading this story and writing this comment, I'm going to end my ramblings here. Thank you for the read. Loved what you had to give. Please continue to be inspired and driven to other works of literature art in the future.
Hey thanks for the comment, I appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the novel.
For the bald guy he is mostly comedic relief but it has a biiiiit of symbolism on him, not directly related to him as for the narration as a whole of the story and how absurd his scenes are. If you haven't checked make sure you read the One Hidden Truth in the main menu, I'm guessing you did but just saying because some people missed it.
T^T it isn't downloading properly!! keeps saying error when i try to open it after downloading
Hello Sandpixie. Sorry to hear that. Maybe you downloaded the wrong version? Make sure you download the windows, linux or mac version according to your system. Also maybe something went wrong during the download in the processs and maybe you need to download again. I can't help you with that since the downloads are managed by itch.io so please just try again. If after that it's still not working let me know and send me a screenshot of the error if possible, I'll help to fix it.
Amazing game, It must be some superb people to have created it. your idiom is special,you are a good writer. And I do like the tale ''Reaching the sun''
Keinart bro...... Seriously i have no words left to describe how awesome you are or how unbelievably Super power infinite times awesome this game is..... usually i am lazy asf and that too a critic in my own way but after this game i have to say my whole world turned upside down... i hardly rate any game..... and that 5 stars is like..... well only happened once before and considering i am typing is like..... i can't believe myself.... it is just showing my support to you bro.... Hands off to you the story about reaching the sun the way you described everyone's personality you are just making me fangirling you more and more considering i am boy... well lets leave it like that for now... the song selections for the background music mainly claire de lune.... you are just freakingly awesome for a human or a monster..... hands off to you bro... i understood every little part of the story... but i only have one thing that i haven't discoved yet... what was the price for the survival competition.... only one question remains for me unanswered.... but please let me know how can i be in touch with you..... i hardly have any friends.... and reason behind it being i never found anyone like me but now you really have turned my whole world upside down..... thank you sooo much creating such an awesome game and introducing me to claire de lune..... and please let m know if there is anyway i can help you.... anyway.... i am from india by the way... and now i am sending all my "social media" friends to download this epic awesome game..... please let me know how can i stay in touch with you..... and i really cant believe myself right now that i have commented for the first time and it being this long... it is as they say the less they speak the more they have inside.... and right now i am all out!!! thank you once again for this epic awesome novel....
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it that much. You can probably find me around twitter https://twitter.com/Keinart
I also have a blog (also I don't update it that much and it's mostly in spanish, sorry for that): http://keinart.weebly.com/
I'm not very talkative myself and I'm usually busy so I can't promise anything but feel free to ask anything from time to time if you want :)
Y'all got more of these masterpieces?
Will there be another more cool VN like this ?
I'm working on my next project right now, it's kinda big compared to this one so it will take some time, I hope I can announce it in a few months!
Welp I'm pretty socially awkward when typing in Spanish even if it's my mother tongue, please put up with me and english lmao ( at least my english's fluent? lol )
aaaah I just finished this, it took me 3 days tbh, cuz I've been in and out, but honestly oh did I enjoy reading this, good lord I'm a lazy ass tbh, lazy enough to quit if there's too much to read, but honestly I loved this to bits I'm even annoyed I finished it now pfft.
Well I read the other comments ( most of them ), and accidentally read your blog and the stuff about Claire, and I must say it's truly impressive, considering I myself have a hard time when developing stories pfft.
Really though, all characters were to deep in personality, story, concepts, and roles that I can't really tell you I disliked a character, cuz character development is something I'm strict over, and I must say it's truly inspiring seeing such well-designed, round, complex characters! Good job on that, it really left a great impression and taste on my mouth~
I did see everyone was commenting upon Claire specifically, or just characters in general ( tbh if it weren't cuz of that blog of yours I'd be lost bout Claire ), but I also really wanted to mention the plot as well.
I must mention I'm an aspiring writer, and there's two things I'm picky to death with, those being Character Development, and Plot. Honestly ( and sadly ), nowadays I find too much cliché and stereotypes in plots, and I must point out I did find it slghtly cliché when Ciar arrived just in time to ask Claire out, since it was in a very used setting, being both under the moonlight and after a graduation. However, it was implied so that it didn't rally make it cringeworthy at all, and even became kinda cute ( I must tell you I was raging over poor Ziva at that time, so I held a small grudge on Claire during that scene pfft ), and knowing who Claire resembled, made it pass and not count as cliché ( aside from the graduation part a bit ), so good job on that as well!
I do NEED to mention now. much. I lo v ed the whole story omg. And I might just rant a bit here but darn Left and Right, the Wolf, the Snake, the Crow, I loved that story to bits and pieces ( and there you go with the ranting again, this wasn't even my point but oh well ). Boy was I dying to know the whole thing behind that small story!! Now that my rushing mind reminds me I'll have to bother you but, do you happen to have any full explanation on what happens with the other characters in the story? I'd love to know if each one of them had a counterpart in OTL? Maybe they resembled somthing else? and is there a story behind why Left and Right had specific names chosen for the Wolf? Maybe he does have a real name? and the crow? what name did the wolf ask him perhaps? I'm really sorry but I'm always so curious when it comes to big awesome plots omg.
Anyways my point wAs, I am truly in love with this story, and its characters. I'll robably even end up making fanart pieces for each character aah, indeed I was just blabbering to my bff on how much I loved this story omg.
Also!! Random question~
I did see in the comments ( sorry I'm an impulsive reader sometimes lol ) that you'd choose ( oh omg I just remembered something I wanted to ask ) either Claire or Luce as your fave character varying on the days pfft
I wanted to know what did you think of Luce, since you already answered about Claire?
And what do you think about the rest? Maybe a fave male as well?
I personally love the three girls, but my constant debate goes between Luce and Ziva, for both exceed in both beauty and knowledge ( please don't take me wrong, I'm a she if that makes it sound less weird pfft ), so I'm thinking I prefer Ziva for being so lovable and extroverted, now that I think about it I also kinda identify with her on how I usually want to be ( if only I weren't that much of an introvert potato ), but really her impression development throughout the story's stunning, and also gives a warm feeling everytime the situation becomes too personal for her. But I also really like Luce for how her constant war with herself doesn't stop her from being how she is, even if she tries not to be it in front of others ( basically the Luce we see from Ciar's POV ), and the warmthness she gives is truly amazing tbh. I'd also say I really love how, while Ziva gives off a motherly, concerned aura at the end of the story, Luce gives a younger figure aura, a more carefree one, even if she still deeply cares, which also really makes me doubt in which I prefer, so I guess it's kinda the same feeling as you with Claire and Luce haha.
And my point before this was to ask, which one's your favorite pairing?
Oh and I read in your blog that all what Ciar was narrating wasn't true, well some parts, so I wanted to know if-- oh wait nevermind now I realize Ziva did mention hersel in One Hidden Truth that they indeed were a couple pff sorry.
But really even if it's just a bit for each, we can see Ciar develop a romantic relationship with each girl, so I wanted to know which one you supported the most? or which one is your fave?
( I'll butt in while proof reading, I remember I also thought Luce was gay for Ziva for a moment? Or vice versa? That caught me off guard lmao, specially since Ciar actually asks if she likes her heh, what are your thoughts on that maybe? )
Aaah one more and I'll stop bothering, I'd love to know if Ausse actually liked Ziva ( which is kinda obvious but still ), and if the thing with the New Substitute Teacher and J... I just downright forgot Jennifer's name but yknow who pfft, I wanted to know if that was one of Ausse's pranks or a real thing pffft.
Well I guess this is where my little "critique" ends, I'm really sorry and I do apologize for taking so much space from the comments section and time from you if you read this, and I'm immensely grateful if you really just were crazy enough to just read this insanity whole!!
But overall, I really loved this whole, and I'm honestly sad there's no more to read haha, I'll also add that I'm really grateful that you took your time to make such a grand thing for free, for us. I'd really donate but I'm still under my parents' care so I'm afraid I'm not allowed to, but you could bet I totally will if I ever get the opportunity!! ( see what I made there, I'm so lame omg lol )
Good luck on your upcoming projects! I really wish to see them already, and hopefully they'll be free, or affordable for a poor soul like me pfft.
I'm sure this comment alone can surpace the number of letters in OTL by golly I'm so sorry you should have a headache by now, but thanks for even skimming through this abomination here, I really hope to see you and your work anytime soon~
Thank you, really!
Woah that was a long comment. I appreciate it, though, I'm glad to see this... passion I guess we can call it. Also I'm answering in english since your comment is in english but Spanish is also my mother tongue so it may be a bit weird.
Well let's see there's a lot to comment. First I wanna tell you that I don't really like to give all the answers, so I may leave some things open. I prefer people thinking about it themselves. And second: SPOILERS, so for people reading this that doesn't know anything about the story, please avoid!
For the Wolf story, well there's a lot to comment there, I may create a blog entry about it one day but the main point behind it was to recreate what you were reading in the story to a point inside another story. The entire "story that should be true" in a more complex way with certain representations and metaphors. The other characters on the story, like the snake, crow and all that, they are not necessarily people from the "real world", but actually influences in the main character. Each chapter represents certain types of "pressure" the wolf receives, expectations he must fulfill if he wants to reach an objective. The very moment you need something from the world, the world will put labels on you on one way or another, that's why in each chapter the characters try to put a "label" on the wolf. The first chapter, about right and left, represents control, and how Ciar was obsessed with controling everything through lies to be able to reach his objective. The entire complex plan to express his feelings avoiding the risks of his trauma, it is made clear how his plan "will fail" because the sun "has already won", because how right and left, black and white, happiness or sadness, how they are change so brutaly at every given moment during this chapter. Because they are all lies, and with so many lies you can't really control anything.
The second chapter with the snake is about tentations. The vivid colors of the snake, her attitude about being really close and flirty. Those represents tentations on Ciar about going "one step ahead", in this case saying the truth about his feelings. However he knows how tentations can lead to the poison of the snake. There's fear of failing now that things are going well, and at the end avoids the snake just to suffer more and more in his doubts, just because at the end all he wants is to make sure the the moon will be there to run away in case he needs it.
The crow chapter is about relationships, that's why is about a collaboration between the wolf and the crow, how they need each other to get an objective, in this case represented through food. What Ciar is trying to express here is how he managed to make it so far until now thanks to his friends (Ziva, Ausse, etc...). He needs of society to reach the sun, all humans needs of others for everything and nobody is truly fully independent, however what is put in doubt here is how real can this relationships be considered. Is there really love? Friendship? Or is everything just people acting for their own benefit (including yourself)? That's why this part of the story is called Real, and the crow never gives his name. In the previous story it was right or left, warm or cold, in this it should be real or false, but it is never really expressed which one is the correct one. So, are these relationships real or false? That's what the wolf (Ciar) doesn't know. Or doesn't want to know, because he himself may be false too.
There's more to it than just this. The references to Skoll and Haiti, Yagatarasu and some other things, but I'll leave those for people to investigate themselves.
Now, about my opinion for the characters. Let's see, this may take long.
Luce: she's great. I just can't help but love her. I tried to create a character that people would fall in love with. Not so much because of her aspect (that she's pretty sure, but Ziva for example was made more appealing exactly for this reason), but because of her personality. I wanted to create someone that you would fall in love with her a little bit more with each scene. So you first see her and she almost doesn't talk, then in each scene she's more and more brave, opening herself more, and showing how strong she actually is. She's the strongest character in the game, she manages to overcome everything by herself and just by her power of will. However, she still becomes embarassed about showing certain parts of herself, and doesn't really want to to be labeled by other people. In that aspect I took some aspects that actually happen to me to try to make her more realistic and tackle some themes in the novel, to make sure her character is more complete. The final plan was to make sure that you, the reader, fall in love with her, so you can identify better with Ciarán at the end and become overwhelmed when she actually saves you, and not the other way around, changing the usual style romantic visual novels follow where the guy saves the girl.
Ziva: She's pretty, and in this case I wanted to make it as a more perfect character. She's the best in every aspect. She loves the main character in her own way, she's popular, helpful, caring, attractive, she's even good at videogames! In a lot of visual novels and anime one thing that happens a lot is how there's clearly a girl that is better at everything that everyone loves, but the main character goes with someone else for no real reason and makes everyone mad. Here I wanted to defy that in a different way most people would understand: Ziva is perfect, but she's not the most compatible person with Ciarán. I think this is something really important that most creators don't know how to handle. The scenes between Luce and Ciarán are interesting because you can see a chemistry between the two. Sure they insult each other and all that, but it's made obvious how their compatibility is really high, however with Ziva is different. They are not compatible, they can be friends, and Ziva sure, is great, but it's not what Ciarán needs. Her caring aspect is not good for a Ciar that, due to his trauma, can't really accept help from other people, that suffers when people spend their time or efforts on him. Luce is different in that aspect, she even bullies Ciar from time to time, but that's precisely what Ciarán needs. So here comes the point: sometimes the best for us is not "the best" option, but the one that helps us to grow, so even though the story with Ziva ends kinda... let's say... bad, at the same time I think no one really felt as if it was forced, people can relate to how Ziva is great but there's a pit that separates the two that can't be helped. Life is not fair, and sometimes you can't do anything about it.
Ausse: Oh man Ausse is such a great character. He's a character that has survived me some other novels and projects that never actually came to light. The first point was to make him the cliche flirty friend that loves all the girls, and sure he is, but it was all to get to his conclusion and theme at the end. About how the personality can't really be set in stone for someone, how people can decide what to be or how to act depending of the situation and that's not a bad thing. People get obsessed about being "something" or "someone" in particular. I'm personally tired of hearing that "just be yourself" as if "yourself" was actually something. People change all the time, they act differently with different people, and that's ok. Ausse takes that and makes jokes about it, becomes whom he wants to become and helps the main character in his own way. Sometimes people think that you can only be friends with someone when you talk serious or deep themes, but I think a good friend can also be that guy that only wants to make you happy, even if it's just with silly things.
Diniz: some people have actually complain about how Diniz wasn't really developed that much, but I think that was a bit the point with him. He's more the kind of the "observer" character, someone that is "just there". You don't see his personality directly since he doesn't talk that much, but through other people. How he was in the past, how he acts in the present. He knows everything but tries to not do that much, he's a bit the opposite to Ziva, trying to help by "not helping". I think he's interesting enough and leaves the reader with doubts and ideas about him that helps to don't make the general plot not so easy. So he's more of a support, a small role that actually impacts big if you keep attention to the details (he's mentioned as soon as in chapter 2, but most people don't even realize this).
Ciar: well he's the main character, so I guess he's my favorite, not so much because of personality but because how complete he is. It's obvious he's the most developed character, but well, this is his story, it's all about his development, so there wouldn't be any point to this story without him. The main point I wanted to make with him was how he was a character in a gray area. Most characters in all stories represent something in society, they are important with great lives so they catch attention, or they are depressive, lost at the bottom, trying to make everything sad. I wanted to make something different with him, as if someone who doesn't really have a reason to be sad or happy. He's not unkown in his class or school, he's a clown after all, but at the same he's kinda unapproachable, since he's so sarcastic and a general asshole about everything. So that puts him in a gray area, people knows him, nobody really cares about him since he seems to be doing well, but at the same time nobody admires him, nobody really wants to be close friends with him. All his relationships are superficial and mediocre, and there's really nothing that makes him special. With time you can hear about his trauma and leg and everything, but the point of all that was how it all was psychological, how he actually didn't really have any problems. Nobody ever blamed him of anything, nobody ever throught high of him: and that was made him suffer. People need an identity, they need to be someone to somebody, to be able to be proud of something, and that was kinda the point about this character and his relationship with Pygmalion story. I think he represents really well the current youth in society, how nowadays most people can't really complain about their lives since they had all their basic necessities covered, they had good families, education, money, everything. But at the same they are nobodies, they are just one more person among a million, they are not the best at anything, neither the worse, they don't have any sad story to share, neither a victory. That gray area creates a void of emptyness in a lot of people, and there's no answer to that, not help.
For the pairing, well I'm the author, so I'm with the pairing I put at the ending lol. I understand some people would like more some other pairings but I guess that's ok, not everyone will feel the same about what I tried to convey and that's great. Same for a possible Ziva and Ausse pairing, I'll let people think what they want about that. Also the Luce and Ziva thing wasn't really gay lol (well, again it's ok if people want to think that), but it was more about Luce just admitting how Ziva was so great. Luce is not really envious or anything and she can be really direct about what she thinks so she doesn't have any issues stating how Ziva is obviously a better person than her, and also has a great body (maybe she has a bit of concern about a lack of something? Oh... I better let this for the readers once again).
The Ausse thing at the end was a bit of a joke and not. The situation actually got out of hand for him, to a point it would put him in an embarassing moment, but since people is used to him being a prankster nobody actually took it seriously. It was a small point I wanted to make about how sometimes being a liar can be really useful if you don't want to be labeled of anything. Nobody would take a clown seriously.
I think this covers everything. Wew that was long. In any case thanks again for your comments, and feel free to ask anything any time again (you can do it in spanish if you want lol). Bye!
Aaah omg tysm for this I feel bad now that you've typed so much omg lol
I'm so hyped over how you've put so much effort in your story all those answers were so developed and it really showed once again how much effort you had put in this whole project.
Aah lo siento, sé que es tu idioma natal también, solo que supongo que estoy más acostumbrada a escribir en inglés ( además me da pereza poner tildes y eso haha )
Also I'm pretty socially awkward when it comes to spanish, for I don't use much expressions with people here, however I d talk a lot online so I guess english would be better to transmit my emotions more clearly haha
and english doesnt need accents ;;v;;
Anyhow uhh I had some questions but I guess I forgot ergh
Oh if it's not creepy, and if I may ask, are you male or female?
I instinctively thought of you as a male, since I mostly see males working on video games rather than females, not for a stereotype but for life experience pfft. However, I saw you getting called a she in a comment, so I got confused lol
Its not really needed but I guess it kinda changes the way I see you, not on my thoughhts but on my impression, if that makes sense pfft.
Now uhh I did have a question, so I'm not leaving without remembering what was it haha;;
Umm I remember it had to do with the front page, I told myself to think in the frint page and I'd recall, but now I don't oof.
Some random questions-- omg you should have a Tumblr Ask Blog for the OTL Crew omg it'd be hilarious and amazing tbh I'd totally spam your feed there pfft.
Does Lice have any drawing style you think of? or did you not think of that lol
I really imagine her going to the realistic sci fi anime style, yknow that one that isn't really anime looking, but it also isnt realism either.
Also about Ziva, she seemed really hurt with the breakup, but were her feelings out of real love or just fake ones she developed due to the pity and need she felt of helping him?
I know you wanna leave questions open to the crowd, so you don't really need to reply to these lol
oof I still can't remember what was I gonna ask
Oh what was Ziva's original introduction ( without Ciar's cosntant interruption ) gonna be? I would've liked to read that too lmao
Aah well sadly I don't remember any of the questions I wanted to make, so you'll have to put up with me later when I remmember ;;v;;
And I really love this story whole hh all the hidden stuff behind it's highly amazing as well ~
I'm a guy, male yes. I don't know why someone called me she before lol. I had a Trumblr long time ago but I didn't really used it that much. What I use the most is twitter (@Keinart) so you can probably find me there.
Uhmm the Luce thing, that's again one of those things I would like to leave people to imagine, but I think something more "mature" and "masculine" would be kinda funny, wouldn't it? Something like Punch of the North Star or Jojo, it would be special and the kinda unexpected thing I would love to find out of someone like Luce.
And the Ziva thing, well, they were kids after all, so they really never had a true relationship as to be sure if they were in love with each other. It's that more pure love or just caring for an old friend? Ziva is the kind of responsible woman that takes care of everything she does by himself, it is mentioned a few times how she took all the work for the committee and some other things until everything would be perfect, so it wouldn't be weird to think that the thing Ziva had with Ciarán was more related to her sense of responsibility than actual love... or maybe not. Again I prefer people thinking about this.
Also her introduction without Ciar it's something like this: "Hi, I'm Ziva. I'm from the same class as Endyein. I love to study the human brain and I hope to become a psychologist one of these days." Kinda the normal introduction, isn't it? I think it's a lot better how it is right now, even if Ziva gets mad for it.
Ahhh sorry for the later reply I never got any notification for this ;;v;;
Andoh fine then thanks for answering ^v^
And yeet if I ever download Twitter again I'll make sure I follow!
Also omg sorry for all those typos I hadn't noticed;;
Omg I just looked those up and those would truly fit Luce tbh pfft I can totally picture her drawing like that
Yep Ziva being more on the Mom Friend duties rather than actual love makes sense, but her being so hurt also got me thinking a lot about it haha. And her introduction indeed is pretty normal and neutral, Ciar really gives a great introcuction for her pffft
Again thanks for replying!!
If i could Explain this in 1 word it would be
UNBELIEVABLE. I have never experienced a game like this and im even sad that it even ended so Keinart Good Luck in your future projects and may the force be with you.
1 question. *SPOILERS*
But when Ciaran says to Ziva can we break up does he mean break up in a Boyfriend/Girlfriend Sense or some other sense ?
Yes. Although not in a traditional sense. It is explained in the true ending, so make sure to click on "One Hidden Truth" in the main menu after the normal ending.
partner,simplemente estupendo, llore la primera vez que me lei la historia entera, despues vengo aqui y veo que tienen todos sus teorias extrañas sobre claire, asi que tengo ganas de decir la propia y luego decir mis agradecimientos
desarrolle dos teorias, bastante distintas entre si, y muy alocadas tambien.
1° la muñeca nunca existio, claire es una acosadora desde siempre
el juego nos dejo claro dos cosas, todo inicio porque raptaron una figurita, y si la muñeca era un cebo? el correo tenia el nombre de alguien que no endyen no conocia, se puede deducir que es alguien que se creo una cuenta con ese nombre, o que uso la cuenta de alguien mas,pero como sabria el correo de ciaran? se lo tuvo que haber preguntado a alguien, u conseguirlo el mismo mediante una charla, u acoso, nos quedaremos con la ultima, porque lo mas probable es que cuaran no tuviera correo hasta los 13,14 años y no conocia a la acosadora a esa edad, y ningun personaje que conozca su correo (el pervertido y la bruja) conocia a la acosadora antes de que se enviaran los correos, y si, la acosadora de la que hablo es claire (solo ella y ausse acosarian a alguien aparte de la victima), porque digo que es acosadora desde siempre?, no tal cual, pero, lo mas probable, es que haya conocido a ciaran en su escondite, la bibilioteca, para ser mas especificos, durante alguna clase de musica, ella, lo veia desde alguna esquina u entre las clases, por lo que ciaran no la recuerda, ella presencio el accidente desde las sombras por asi decirlo, se enamoro de el y su mentalidad la llevo hasta acosarlo durante varios año, de alguna manera se entero de que estudiaba en enatae y pidio que fuera a estudiar ahi,pero no sabia que se fue a dujane despues del accidente y sus padres se rehusaron a cambiarla de colegio de nuevo debido a problemas economicos, al ser tan pequeña, ciaran no se daba cuenta de su presencia, al ver lo mucho que sufria, decidio crear un plan maestro, donde ella pondria una muñeca a la venta, obviamente falsa, y mandaria un correo con algun correo de un compañero u falso ,para que, sabiendo como era el y sus amigos debido a tanto tiempo de acoso, terminaria aceptando ir al lugar indicado, para encontrarse con luce aurea, conociendo la personalidad de ambos ( tambien acoso a luce para su plan), de alguna manera volver a luce el "sol" y que al final ella se vuelva la "luna", la que le daria el descanso despues de todo lo que habia pasado, el accidente, separarse de sus amigos,etc . por eso fingia no saber donde quedaba la muñea, porque era falsa, y la caja que se muestra al final de una verdad oculta estaba vacia por lo mismo. basicamente,ella planeo todo el juego de alguna manera para que ciaran, su amor, pudiera ser feliz, y si dicen que claire estara loca pero no es acosadora, como es que puede leerlo como un libro abierto si ella apenas lo deberia haber conococido, y hasta sabe la ventana que conduce a su habitación.
2° hay dos claire
esta va a estar algo fumada, hay dos claire argyris, una es una manifestacion del efecto pigmaleon y la otra, es una chica que estudia en enatae, y que va recibiendo la informacion de la ultima, el principio de la historia y durante partes de la misma, se dejo claro que ciaran tenia un gran aprecio por sus muñecas, pero porque este? lo mas probable es que haya desarrolado un trastorno debido al accidente, donde sentia de alguna manera que sus personajes si podian entenderle, el le agarro tanto a amor a una de ellas, o se creyo tanto lo de su trastorno, que la muñeca, cobro vida y aparece solo ante ciaran, causa algunas cosas, como los correos y la claire que vemos en "cuento de una primera cita", y despues le la informacion a la claire real, la cual es una chica que tras ver en algun momento anterior cercano a el pedido de la muñeco a ciaran, se enamora a primera vista de el, y ciaran, al ver el ligero parecido a ella en la muñeca, la muñeca toma su aspecto y la habilidad de pasar la informacion de sus acciones a la claire real, aqui solo se puede decir que hay dos pruebas, la habilidad de la claire falsa de saber todo sobre ciaran, y una pequeña escena algo controversial, al final de "cuento de una primera cita", cuando se revela que claire fue quien le mando los correos a ciaran, aqui se dice que su sombrero salio volando y que luego ella desaparece, pero si es un lugar tan alto, un sombrero sale volando, lo mas probable es que termine en el techo de alguien o que se haya topado en el camino de alguien y lo haya tirado o regalado, las posibilidades de que lo haya encontrado son casi nulas,y el hecho de simplemente haya desaparecido apoya esto bastante (y no chicos, no creo que se haya lanzado por el sombrero y que no haya tenido nada)
ahora los agradecimientos:
gracias a ciaran, por hacerme entender la felicidad no esta en las metas
gracias a luce , por mostrar que un amigo no lo es hasta compartir con el un secreto/experiencia/verguenza
gracias a ausse, por enseñarme que aunque seas rico, puedes ser humilde y que el amor aunque sea pervertido, sigue siendo una clase de amor
gracias a ziva, por enseñarme a nunca dejar que un amigo sufra
gracias a diniz, por enseñarne que lo mejor que puedes hacer es guiar a tus amigos
gracias al calvo, por enseñarme que por muy mala actitud que tengas, puedes ser lo que sea ( esto se me vino hasta 2 o 3 veces que me vi la historia)
gracias a claire, por mostrarme que todos necesitamos una luna en nuestras vidas
gracias a los que seleccionaron la musica, por ser capaces de transmitir sentimientos casi propios con musica no compuesta por ustedes
y gracias a keinart, por escribir una historia que me lleno de todos los sentimientos posibles, una historia que se basa en hechos proximamente reales
espero tu proxima historia, keinart,sera genial seguro
No se si al terminar el One Thousand Lies seguiste con el One Hidden Truth que sale al terminar y es que Ciaran le explica a Luce que el planeo todo...pero buenas teorías tienes una mas fumada pero igual de buena.
Aun así quería que dieran mas información por lo de Ziva, quería saber un poco mas como terminaría su relación con ella solo por curiosidad, de hecho quiero mas de la historia...UNA CONTINUACIÓN!
First of all, I would to thank you for creating this amazing VN. It's probably the best free VN I've ever read with a unique story and hilarious character interactions.
However, i would like to ask a simple question. If you're fine with sharing, can I ask how many words long was this VN? Thanks a bunch!
Thank you! The novel is around 110k words long if I remember correctly, more or less.
Incredible (PLEASE READ!!!)
The only word that is close enough to even slightly describe the contents of this novel. I pretty much made an account just to be able to communicate with you, the author.
I'm still trying to figure out what is going on with Claire... You gave some clues in another comment, but unfortunately Google translate failed me once again... Could you perhaps help me out? So far I think that Claire was imaginary, her purpose only being a way of explaining where the e-mails came from. Was she Ciarán's DECEPTION? Did he try to deceive himself by personifying a part of him; acting like it was her/this part's fault for sending the messages? Maybe she is the part of Ciarán that wants to stay away from people. So when she wanted an answer on Graduation day it was litteraly Ciarán asking himself wether he wanted to stay alone(be with Claire). In the end we saw him propose to her. Perhaps he decided to stay alone(with Claire) forever? What I still don't get is how other people still see her as a person... Maybe it's Ciarán speaking or what he is currently thinking... Although it wouldn't make sense since when they were playing poker Claire won and Luce congratulated her (kind of). Then again when they were competing against each other Luce told Ciarán that he had won once previously and she had won once too. So was Claire's victory a lie? Had Luce won on the poker match or was victory hers too since Claire was on the girls' team? Also, Claire's sudden appearances and the fact that Ciarán said she was always with him kind of give us a hint about her non existence. I need to read this again but these are my current thoughts. Though, in conclusion I think she's the other part of Ciarán. The one afraid to be with people. Let's not forget that when Ciarán left the phone on the desk to talk to Claire no one really spoke, since Luce didn't hear a thing. I feel like Ciaran was lying to us; the readers (or maybe even to himself).
END OF INCREDIBLY LONG SPOILERS~~~~~~
Now, the other thing that caught my attention were all the greek related names. As a greek myself, I found it fun to realise that some of the names you used have greek origins, or they even are greek words written with English characters. For example Luce Aurea. Here you obviously used the greek adjective ωραία (meaning: pretty, good looking). You explained that Endyein comes from greek too. Also Claire's surname is a greek name nowadays (Argyris / Αργύρηs). I'm confident that in Ancient Greece you could've found someone with that kind of surname since most people used their father's name as a surname. For example: if we used this kind of surname method nowadays if your father was named, for example William your surname would be Williams. Surnames like these still exist but we are no longer named after our fathers as you probably know already. Sorry I started ranting... I got a bit excited that's all.
Well...This is more like a letter to you now XD
If you read this far, thank you! I've never really written a comment this long... But I'm not exactly a fan of comments either, since I'm either too bored to write anything or too shy to state my opinion. But your story made me want to desperately try to get a few answers and opinions out of you. I really hope you reply because I'd love to hear your opinion on my theories.
Wow, thank you, I'm glad you liked it so much. Let's start from the beginning and see what I can answer:
Everyone is always confused about that character lol. I actually prefer not to say it so I can let people think about it, but I can say you are not totally mistaken with your assumption and are actually pretty close! I personally prefer if you think more about it instead of giving you the answer directly, but If you still wanna know for sure what happened I can tell you that someone in the Steam forums of the game managed to solve it, so you can look there to find the answer. Since someone "already solved it" I took the freedom of creating a personal blog too where I give some answers about One Thousand Lies and some other things: http://keinart.weebly.com/
The blog is bilingüal so you can filter to only english entries. Still I personally prefer if people don't try to get the answer from me at least until they haven't think about it first. In the other hand I prefer to give an "official answer" because I hate those pretentious authors that never give any answers, I always get the feeling that they never actually had any idea of what they were doing and are just letting the fans to fill the holes in their own story with whatever they can come up. One Thousand Lies contains some certains points that are open in purpose, but mostly everything has an answer.
About greek, yes I used a lot of greek! The story after all is a new modern interpretation of the Pygmalion myth, so there's a huge greek influence. Ciarán's surname is also greek, ενδυειν, that at the same time is a variation of another myth, the myth of Endymion. For Claire you are not mistaken. I thought that was a surname, I didn't know it was a name nowadays.
For Luce however I made a bit of a play there so even thought it can be read in Greek, the main meaning for her surname is not from Greek but from Latin (but we all know how Latin took a lot from Greek anyways), so her surname meaning is actually "Golden". Claire surname is supposed to mean "Silver" so take your own conclusions considering the story (this is also something that I answer in the blog, so take a look if you want).
Anyways thank you very much for reading and for your comment, I appreciate it a lot.
I'm so glad you replied to my comment! I thought about Claire a bit and then I visited the website. I read a bit of the Claire article and honestly that's genius. I tried not to read much of it and I didn't read the steam comments, because I feel like Claire should remain at least a small mystery. That's her charm after all right?
I definately see how much work you put into her character and that's why I have to say she's one of my favourites. Although, when you put effort into creating each character you usually don't have a favourite. Since I'm trying to think of a general idea and characters for an upcoming webcomic (honestly I don't even know how long it's going to take me to start writing it) I kind of understand the feeling.
I started a new subject already?
I have so many things to talk about haha
Now, about the story:
Have you gotten bored already? I'm probably the definition of a chatter box, heh (representing Ciaráns weird smile)
(don't listen to that dingus; she wants me dead)
BACK to what I was saying; your story and the concept around it was incredible. (Using that adjective again? Really?) ("Shut up I'm trying to make a good impression here.") I hate your characters and I must say that is the worst visual novel I've ever read. I feel like even if I am much better than you, I found a marvellous novel. ("STOP COVERING MY WORDS!") (Oh come on I was saying good things about you) ("NO, you were insulting the excellent author!") (Oh now you discreetly compliment her? I didn't think we were that kind of person)
ANYWAYS, the last thing I wanted to say in this comment is that if you need any ideas or help for any upcoming novel, I'd be glad to assist you. I bet you have a wonderful team helping you but if you need another source of inspiration don't hesitate to contact me.
("See now I bet she got the wrong impression!") (You always give the wrong impression.) ("It was your fault!") (Bahaha. Of course it was. Am I not here on purpose?) ("...")
This was just a silly addition to this comment. I love this kind of stuff haha. (Yeah, keep trying to explain my existence.) ("I think I did that already (:") (Have I ever told you how much I "love" you?) ("No but that's so nice of you!") (You... -the following words were censored due to Italic's stupidity-)I have many more things to talk about, but for the sake of this comment I'll stop here. :) And I will definately check your blog once in a while!
Me encanto tu juego no se que decir me parecio absolutamente genial, me cree una cuenta solo para escribir esto.
Gracias por darnos algunas horas de diversión.
Este juego me encanto demasiado, en serio me dejo marcado, y quiero darte las gracias ya que los mensajes que quisiste dar a través de la historia me ayudaron mucho.
Ahora mismo lo estoy re-jugando para ver todas esas pistas de las que no me había dado cuenta antes, espero ver más trabajos tuyos más adelante. Si pudiese te donaría lo digo en serio pero ahora no es que pueda pero yo se que te lo mereces, un gran trabajo, increíble historia, excelentes personajes, banda sonora (que a pesar de no ser creada para este "proyecto") siempre ideal en cada situación.
Ojala algún día puedas contar ese secreto de la historia que deja tan marcados, gracias, y suerte en el futuro.
P.D.: Una preguntita rápida XD ¿como se pronuncia el apellido de Ciarán? es que siempre que lo leo nunca se como decirlo.
Gracias a ti por leerlo y por el comentario, me alegra que te haya gustado tanto.
Lo del apellido es normal porque es Griego (ενδυειν) y es algo complicado, se pronuncia como "endin", alargando la "i". Significa algo así como "adentrarse en el interior" y es de donde viene el nombre Endimión. En la mitología griega la diosa de la luna Selene se enamora de Endimión, y bueno, digamos que tiene una profunda relación con la historia al igual que con Pigmalión.
Muchas gracias por crear este juego, de verdad me ha encantado y me ha llegado muy profundo, tanto las historias que "escribe el protagonista" como la historia principal. Ha conseguido tanto hacerme reír a carcajadas como hacerme soltar alguna lagrima, y me he enamorado de todos y cada uno de los personajes, incluso el calvo cabrón xD.
Sin duda voy a donar, porqué una creación como esta lo merece, y pienso hacer publicidad de tu juego entre todos mis conocidos que puedan estar interesados.
Muchas gracias por darme estos buenos momentos y enhorabuena por esta obra de arte, tanto a ti como a todo el equipo que te ha ayudado, me he enamorado de vuestro trabajo y voy a releerlo varias veces, aunque creo que he conseguido comprender quien es Claire, no lo tengo muy claro, al igual que muchas de las personas que han comentado.
Un abrazo de un nuevo fan que estará pendiente de si sacas nuevos trabajos en un futuro, lo cual me encantaría, ojalá encuentres el tiempo y la posibilidad de hacerlo. ^_^
Hola, primero enserio que gracias por este juego y las donaciones por que enserio no me lo espere, fue muy buena idea colocarlo en steam y si te soy sincero lo baje solo al ver sus imagenes y que colocaban que era bueno y gratis y en español (mejor aun!) me esperaba mas una simple novela de amor cliche 1 prota 3 chicas escojo a una fin, pero enserio que despues de jugarlo me sorprendió y dejo boca abierta.
La musica para mi perfecta siempre en el momento adecuado simple pero eficaz, por los gráficos algo simple aunque las imágenes claves de las chicas son de 10/10 aunque me hubiera encantado ver mas escenas así ejemplo la de assue con la profesora y el Manolo o al calvo cabron con su metralleta y flauta allí si que quedaba en el piso muerto por un ataque de risa. Pero al ser un juego gratis se entiende y justifica.
La historia mas que perfecta tratas de temas profundos que se enlazan con la mentira y la sociedad y me fascinó luce me hizo recordar a mi adolecencia e identificarme un poco con su carácter y sentimientos.
Hay algo que si te pregunto me dejaste peor que una chica que dejan en visto y que no pude dormí ese día. Que es claire!? En comentario anteriores dijiste que nos fijaramos primero en su objetivo, con quien hablaba, como Ciarán la usaba. Es algo difícil saberlo sin foro de discusión jajaja pero lo que he logrado descifrar, para mi su objetivo es lograr que Ciarán logre superar su problema psicológico que al final lo llevaba a querer controlar todo lo que quería aunque no pudiera a no poder hablar con sus antiguos amigos ni poder entablar una relación amorosa nueva, ella a la vez seria como la compasion así como el cuento del lobo ella seria la luna y aunque no lo escribió Ciarán ese sol que creía que no podía alcanzar era luce (mas que evidente al final) me pregunto ahora con el final, ella existe? Es una mentira de Ciarán tan grande que se matearelizo? Si sería así tendría sentido, ciaran miente de una forma que el mismo termina creyendo eso así que tendria sentido claire sea ese alter ego de el mismo queriendo superar su problema con una apariencia inocente para no sentirse amenazado y usado por Ciarán para poder acercarse a luce aunque se lo niegue y quiera caer en la autocompadesencia.
Si es lo mas raro que he dicho toda mi vida pero ya no se que pensar en esos temas no soy bueno jajaja.
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Bueno con mi duda desahogada al autor, enserio que te felicito son pocas las historias que me dejan deseando mas ojala siguas mejorando y creando mas historias como estas, no te desanimes por malos comentarios en steam algunos de ellos esperaban muchos dibujos hd y ecchi por un juego gratis en vez de ver la calidad de historia.
Gracias por leer, saludos y felicidad!
Muy buenas noches. Ayer terminé la novela y para serte sincero es una de las pocas que suelen atraparme tanto como lo hizo esta. Quería darte las gracias por subirlo a Steam, pués ahí es donde la conocí. El título fue lo que me llamó la atención y obviamente la palabra "gratis" influyó un poco. Cómo estoy un poco cansado de la monotonía de los juegos de siempre quise probar algo distinto, ya sabía de antemano que era una "novela gráfica" (me gusta llamarlo así, espero no ofender) asi que le dí a "jugar" y lo "jugué".
Ya de entrada, las imágenes y la música me hacen sentir cómodo, me relaja, me incita a seguir leyendo y vaya que lo hice! y cómo lo disfruté fue algo asombroso, lo que he reído y lo que he llegado a sentir es indescriptible. A mi también, como dicen más abajo, el juego me duró mucho más de 6 horas. En varias partes quedaba reflexionando sobre las oraciones que citaban, en algunas ocasiones no pasaba la página para simplemente seguir escuchando la melodía, imaginándome la situación del momento...
En fin.. quiero ser breve porque sino, no termino nunca de escribir xD
Muchas gracias por subirlo/agregarlo a Steam y por sobre todo, gracias por crear semejante obra, a vos y a todos los involucrados.
Saludos! desde Rosario, Santa Fe - Argentina.
Hola! acabo de terminar la novela y me ha dejado una especie de vacío que no puedo describir. Realmente muchas gracias a tí y al grupo que te ayudó a crear esta hermosa obra, especialmente tener acceso a ella en español. Creo que por más que pueda comprenderse o traducirse un idioma nunca será lo mismo que podeer leer algo en tu lengua materna.
He de decir que esta novela me llevó más de lo esperado, siendo unas 14 horas de deleite visual, esto fue gracias a que en muchas partes del juego me quedé mirando la pantalla sin avanzar, debido a que en varios puntos del juego las frases me hacían reflexionar sobre mi propia vida, incluso creo que podría tener similitudes con Ciarán.
Algo que me resultó curioso fue que el protagonista no se mostrara en ningún momento, lo hace parecer que Ciarán somos nosotros, independientemente del sexo al que pertenezcamos tras la pantalla.
Aprovechando que en su mayoría aquí son de habla inglesa pasaré escribir algunos spoilers con motivo de pregunta.
Me han quedado algunas dudas, por ejemplo:
-¿Por qué Ciarán actúa como si no conociera a Diniz y éste pareciera que en ocasiones le sigue la corriente? ya que con Ziva no hace eso.
- ¿Qué es Claire?, ¿Un producto de imaginación de Ciarán?, ¿está muerta?, por otro lado los demás personajes se han dirigido a ella, así que esto último no puede ser, además de que la novela no tiene toques fuera de lo real.
Tal vez las preguntas sean muy tontas y se me escapó algún detalle, lo siento de antemano ^^
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Pasando a otra cosa, me gustaría saber cómo puede ponerse un juego gratis en steam.
No es que lo vaya a hacer ahora, tal vez nunca lo haré, pero creo que sería interesante darle vida a esas historias que guardo en una carpeta, aunque lejos estoy de saber utilizar Ren'Py, pero todo se aprende jajaja, y la verdad me vi queriendo tal vez hacer esto algún día inspirada por esta novela.
Ya sin más vuelvo a agradecerte a ti y a tu equipo por este fabuloso trabajo♥
Banda sonora: 10/10
Problemas psicológicos generados por la interpretación de cada uno: ??/10
Espero poder disfrutar más de estas novelas en el futuro!
Ah! y si se puede colaborar monetariamente en algún lugar déjame el link, ya que efectivamente hubiera pagado por este juego!
Muchas gracias a ti por leerla. Esta clase de comentarios hace que valga la pena todo al final, así que muchas gracias. Ahora, sobre tus spoilers:
1. Realmente tanto Ziva como Diniz no es que no actúen como si no le conocieran, sino que jamás mencionan el pasado e intentan hacerse los locos respecto a ese tema. Es un tema tabú ya que cualquier mención al mismo activa el trauma del protagonista y por ende el dolor en su pierna. Ya desde la presentación de Diniz intenté que los diálogos de Ciar con él fueran un tanto "extraños", como que da un poco de vergüenza ajena verlos, con silencios indebidos. Intentan actuar como si no pasase nada pero se nota que hay algo ahí que falla.
2. La segunda pregunta, bueno, esta es la pregunta que me hace todo el mundo jajaja. La verdad es que prefiero no dar la respuesta 100% y dejar que la gente sea la que piense al respecto y saque sus propias versiones. Aunque puedo asegurar que hay una explicación lógica detrás de todo lo de Claire. Te daré una pista de todas maneras, lo importante no es tanto lo que ella "es", o si existe o si no existe, sino el contexto en torno a ella. ¿Cuál era su objetivo? ¿De qué o quién hablaban sus diálogos? ¿Para qué la usaba Ciarán? Sólo existe una única respuesta a todas esas preguntas que tenga sentido, y esa es la realidad de esta historia. En un tiempo de todas maneras igual me animo a dar todas las respuestas de la historia claramente, pero prefiero dejar un tiempo para que cada uno se coma el coco lo que quiera.
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Sobre poner un juego gratis en Steam, pues sólo tienes que intentar pasar el Greenlight. Dentro de la propia Steam tienen esa opción y sólo tienes que seguir los pasos. El único problema es que tienes que pagar 100 dólares para poder entrar, y luego depende de los votos de la comunidad y un poco de suerte que te pillen. Pero oye, yo nunca pensé que me aceptarían y aquí estoy. Yo empecé como tú, tenía alguna cosa escrita y quise animarme a hacer algo más grande y me puse a aprender Renpy, un poco de programación y a intentar mejorar mi escritura. Para mi sería un honor motivar a más personas a dedicarse a esto y si esto es lo que quieres hacer, ¡HAZLO! No dudes, se pasan muchos momentos malos y muchos altibajos, pero luego puedes leer comentarios de gente que se emociona con lo que has escrito y hace que todo lo demás merezca la pena :)
Si quieres colaborar económicamente, pues bueno, aquí en Itch.io puedes "comprar" el juego (aunque ya lo tengas) dandole a descargar o puedes directamente irte a mi paypal: http://paypal.me/keinart De todas maneras el dinero es secundario y si te resulta difícil o no puedes usar paypal o cualquier otra cosa pues no te preocupes. La intención y el sentimiento es lo que cuenta.
Muchas gracias de nuevo y la mejor de las suertes para ti y tu futuro.
- Hi, just wanted to say that this game was beautiful. The soundtrack, the art, the story ( The conversations were articulate but still sounded like a bunch of friends goofing off, which I loved.) I laughed at all the little gags and references but the serious parts still hit me pretty hard. Just.. Thank you. It seems like you put a lot of work into this and it definitely paid off. I'm just a bit confused about the ending concerning Luce and Claires relationships with Ciarán. Considering I finishing the game in the early hours of the morning, I guess maybe I just didn't catch on. Anyhow, thanks again. It was really great.
Thank you very much for your comment, it's greatly appreciated.
Everyone is always asking about the ending. I understand it's a bit hard to understand, still I prefer if people think by themselves their own versions :)